Week 7 - Lynn

I like how this focus more on the hesitation than the leaving. The sparsity of it (the short single-line stanzas, the consistent space between lines) works well to communicate the disconnect and lack of communication that the subject must have been feeling, or that his loved ones must have been feeling from him. It also does not over share. I feel like this tells us just enough to have an emotional impact. And I like the indirectness of the ending, how it tells us what he thought, not (necessarily) what he did.

My suggestion of this is the lose the quotation marks in the first line.